tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post7373848953127741942..comments2023-04-09T11:25:34.823+01:00Comments on The Raven in the Writing Desk: Five Sentence Fiction: LostMatt Sloanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13243128627804928961noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-35227457647476392362012-06-17T23:14:25.858+01:002012-06-17T23:14:25.858+01:00Oh, hello! That's a story I want to read :) Th...Oh, hello! That's a story I want to read :) The way you set this up, each word had meaning, was so perfect.Lillie McFerrinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05367116687588265202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-75136678398148418642012-06-14T05:56:57.148+01:002012-06-14T05:56:57.148+01:00Chills ran down my spine near the end of that, esp...Chills ran down my spine near the end of that, especially when I read "..and her voyeur’s shadow dart past the candlelight."<br /><br />Eeeek, Sophie! What are you playing at?? I hope, this voyeur is actually a knight in shining armour to save her! :-) If not, she is making a huge mistake!!!<br /><br />Lets think positive!!!! Great Job, Sir xGemmiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07682621511053130096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-28890274215568867282012-06-12T22:16:50.417+01:002012-06-12T22:16:50.417+01:00Yikes! Chilling. Creepy. Her worst nightmare. I se...Yikes! Chilling. Creepy. Her worst nightmare. I see this as a thriller scene from a movie script. Nice work. Here's mine:<br />www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.comLoranoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-76920083119614896592012-06-12T19:03:55.275+01:002012-06-12T19:03:55.275+01:00Thank you =) who knows, perhaps something will com...Thank you =) who knows, perhaps something will come of it someday. Thanks for reading.Matt Sloanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243128627804928961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-79954557536032719192012-06-12T19:03:33.129+01:002012-06-12T19:03:33.129+01:00Thanks for the kind words =) glad you enjoyed.Thanks for the kind words =) glad you enjoyed.Matt Sloanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243128627804928961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-87092069368222086842012-06-12T19:01:50.474+01:002012-06-12T19:01:50.474+01:00But of course, challenging stereotypes and the lik...But of course, challenging stereotypes and the like.<br />Will take a look at yours =) thanks for reading.Matt Sloanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243128627804928961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-33163008933720828092012-06-12T19:00:40.299+01:002012-06-12T19:00:40.299+01:00Thanks! I do love a bit of tension.Thanks! I do love a bit of tension.Matt Sloanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243128627804928961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-1881090211082044992012-06-12T19:00:21.213+01:002012-06-12T19:00:21.213+01:00Thank you =) and thanks for reading.Thank you =) and thanks for reading.Matt Sloanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243128627804928961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-70019498169759782402012-06-12T19:00:03.441+01:002012-06-12T19:00:03.441+01:00Thanks!Thanks!Matt Sloanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243128627804928961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-68909182880981118812012-06-12T18:59:55.018+01:002012-06-12T18:59:55.018+01:00Haha =) thank you. Didn't feel like it was my ...Haha =) thank you. Didn't feel like it was my strongest, at all, being so formulaic.Matt Sloanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243128627804928961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-87441899760915697352012-06-12T18:59:23.684+01:002012-06-12T18:59:23.684+01:00Thanks! That was a great day, up in the reservoirs...Thanks! That was a great day, up in the reservoirs above my town. Could barely see in front of you.Matt Sloanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243128627804928961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-86696117854146860012012-06-12T18:58:46.270+01:002012-06-12T18:58:46.270+01:00Thank you =) glad that came across.Thank you =) glad that came across.Matt Sloanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243128627804928961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-59114428981195500032012-06-12T03:59:40.674+01:002012-06-12T03:59:40.674+01:00I agree that this could morph into a longer short ...I agree that this could morph into a longer short story or even novel. You do a great job of creating tension and a sense of place.Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2012/06/11/prisoner/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-63378169740094673792012-06-11T19:11:19.075+01:002012-06-11T19:11:19.075+01:00I love a great mystery! The descriptions are very ...I love a great mystery! The descriptions are very detailed and I could picture every word. I would love to know what happens next. Great job!Stephaniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03733516439846527903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-16018884872827522032012-06-09T16:19:59.482+01:002012-06-09T16:19:59.482+01:00Scary but intriguing. This could go in so many di...Scary but intriguing. This could go in so many different directions. The voyeur does not, of course, have to be her enemy. He might turn out to be her unlikely savior! Ok, so I'm sappy...<br /><br /><br />Mine is here: www.thejadedlens.com/2012/06/08/FrancescaBritton Minorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04095446985643011393noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-84853405692067592312012-06-09T09:33:35.564+01:002012-06-09T09:33:35.564+01:00This is c-r-e-e-p-y! It lends itself to so many po...This is c-r-e-e-p-y! It lends itself to so many possibilities... great tension!michellehttp://writer-in-transit.co.za/f-s-f-lost/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-75425427524848128982012-06-09T02:45:02.008+01:002012-06-09T02:45:02.008+01:00Oh creepy ending! I'd take some Python advice ...Oh creepy ending! I'd take some Python advice here... "Run away!" Nicely done.Cara Michaelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00956521710750982258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-70101736345831307322012-06-08T21:36:47.736+01:002012-06-08T21:36:47.736+01:00Great suspense! Provokes so many questions! Well d...Great suspense! Provokes so many questions! Well done!Miranda Katehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11166000575283710451noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-36003620636862294682012-06-08T19:26:23.311+01:002012-06-08T19:26:23.311+01:00Eeee! No, Sophie, NO!!! Don't go in the house!...Eeee! No, Sophie, NO!!! Don't go in the house! Ahhhhhh!<br /><br />Well done! I do like this. A LOT. (Well, other than being worried about poor Sophie...)Angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05145626477713347271noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-38598600501220282962012-06-08T16:11:46.743+01:002012-06-08T16:11:46.743+01:00I think I'd run, very fast...at this point! I ...I think I'd run, very fast...at this point! I like your misty picture too!Lisa Shambrookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12767127776898278402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2205644813725273045.post-84774074159164932312012-06-08T14:08:04.805+01:002012-06-08T14:08:04.805+01:00Oh dear, someone's made the wrong decision her...Oh dear, someone's made the wrong decision here. I liked this, there was a very clear sense of being lost in this.Sandra Crookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00534491053812317718noreply@blogger.com